Monday, October 5, 2009

A Whole New World

This novel writing business sure is exciting, isn't it? Well, sometimes. I hear the groans from those of you who have actually finished, revised, re-written and re-read a novel. :-)

I wrote 1200 words today. But, not consecutively. Does that make sense? I wrote out a conversation that played out in my head to take place at some point in the novel-but not at the point I'm actually at. I wrote the end, or a bit of the ending. I have a paragraph that I'm really stumbling on. Does anyone want to chime in?

Here goes.

When she first left home, the romanticism of her mother finding her in Las Vegas, her mother offering a sober and heartfelt apology was so desired that Audra looked for it. Every car door she opened-when that was the only job the casinos would give her-she searched every face, every female southern accent caught her ear, every ring of the phone. It never happened, and Audra came to the realization that it never would. She spent the next few years bitter about it, and soon found out that it was draining. So, she ignored it. Any time her mother or that dusty little town entered her mind, she changed gears.

Late night edit-I found it, I just needed to be deliriously tired, but in a silent and calm household. :)

The romanticism of her mother finding her in Las Vegas and offering a sober and heartfelt apology consumed Audra for the first year in the new city. The only job casino owners would give her, opening car doors, gave her opportunity to search every face. Every female southern accent caught her ear, every ring of her phone caused her heart to race with anticipation. It never happened and Audra came to the realization that it never would. She spent the next few years bitter about it and soon found it that it was draining her, rather than motivating her. Finally, she ignored her past altogether. Any time her mother or that dusty little town entered her mind, she changed gears.

3 comments:

  1. Kristi, I think it is a great idea to write other parts of the book. It really helps with the writers block. So you go girl. Did you write the letter?

    And exactly how are you stumbling on this paragraph?

    I wonder if romanticism is too much of a mouthful for the reader. Read it to yourself out loud and see what you think? I like it though. Hey that name is just perfect though. You know I love it. Beautiful. I love the paragraph too. Reading it made me feel bad for Audra. And that's what you want girl. :) Good luck friend. :)

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  2. The sheer length of the first sentence is what turned me off as a reader. The writing itself is quite good. It's beautiful, it fits, and I get a clear picture of what's going on just from that one captured moment.

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  3. Uninvoked-thank you for stopping by and leaving such a graceful compliment. I truly appreciate it. The first sentence is long, and may be why I keep stumbling on the second sentence.

    Robyn: I feel like a tongue tied teenage boy asking his first girl out. I know what I want to portray-but it isn't coming out as smoothly as I had envisioned! :) I did write the letter and I found out that poor Audra is terribly insecure. I found out that she really needs some kind of choice in her life instead of all these 'circumstances' being thrown at her. So-that definitely worked, thank you!!

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