tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post5272076421384776930..comments2023-09-30T01:18:33.562-04:00Comments on R.A.W. **Random Acts of Writing**: A Whole New WorldKristi Faithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17527544253341529009noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post-46244795429940877042009-10-05T22:39:39.262-04:002009-10-05T22:39:39.262-04:00Uninvoked-thank you for stopping by and leaving su...Uninvoked-thank you for stopping by and leaving such a graceful compliment. I truly appreciate it. The first sentence is long, and may be why I keep stumbling on the second sentence. <br /><br />Robyn: I feel like a tongue tied teenage boy asking his first girl out. I know what I want to portray-but it isn't coming out as smoothly as I had envisioned! :) I did write the letter and I found out that poor Audra is terribly insecure. I found out that she really needs some kind of choice in her life instead of all these 'circumstances' being thrown at her. So-that definitely worked, thank you!!Kristi Faithhttp://kristifaith.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post-50242267219202624642009-10-05T22:12:41.868-04:002009-10-05T22:12:41.868-04:00The sheer length of the first sentence is what tur...The sheer length of the first sentence is what turned me off as a reader. The writing itself is quite good. It's beautiful, it fits, and I get a clear picture of what's going on just from that one captured moment.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post-68626823762273672552009-10-05T22:05:24.916-04:002009-10-05T22:05:24.916-04:00Kristi, I think it is a great idea to write other ...Kristi, I think it is a great idea to write other parts of the book. It really helps with the writers block. So you go girl. Did you write the letter? <br /><br />And exactly how are you stumbling on this paragraph? <br /><br />I wonder if romanticism is too much of a mouthful for the reader. Read it to yourself out loud and see what you think? I like it though. Hey that name is just perfect though. You know I love it. Beautiful. I love the paragraph too. Reading it made me feel bad for Audra. And that's what you want girl. :) Good luck friend. :)Robyn Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17356555082768185840noreply@blogger.com