tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post6285083281964894332..comments2023-09-30T01:18:33.562-04:00Comments on R.A.W. **Random Acts of Writing**: WIP WednesdayKristi Faithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17527544253341529009noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post-54120315319224386992010-06-09T10:59:48.809-04:002010-06-09T10:59:48.809-04:00I took a class that recommended you only describe ...I took a class that recommended you only describe what is important, but create a picture with what you choose to describe. She used a library as an example and in not only describing the library she revealed about character. If you are describing from a characters viewpoint how they see something should also give you insight into them. <br /><br />I suck at description. One of my critique partners writes beautiful description. Very lyrical. I on the other hand struggle over every single word I try to insert to describe. And usually those words are flat and boring. <br /><br />But it's something I work on so eventually I just might get it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18370670423819447249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19177238389402380.post-77375065491421011012010-06-09T10:18:20.506-04:002010-06-09T10:18:20.506-04:00I like this scene, but when reading this I sort of...I like this scene, but when reading this I sort of saw it in black and white. Have you considered adding color to the description somehow? I know it's dark and they are seeing everything by candle light, but maybe some color would help solidify the imagery? Like the crystals glowed purple in the pale yellow glow of the candle... (not a good example, I know). I know too many color references can be annoying, but I like a bit of color to sort of focus the visual for me. <br /><br />Of course, when I try and describe a room, it comes off like a realtor describing to snag a sale: "if you look to the left you'll see a couch and a chair, and across the way is the tv. And behind that is the book shelves, and did I mention the amazine picture windows that look out over the bay?" so my advice probably isn't worth much!<br /><br />Now I want to know what the cool room is used for...j.leigh.baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12086576155269323425noreply@blogger.com